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The Human Snowflake

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With winter comes the death for which its cold is known,
But joining it are fragile beings of its own,
Containing each a pattern found it in alone.
Could such perfection ever on its own arise?
Or must the detailed harmony that each supplies
Be fashioned by a master craftsman in the skies?

But no such craftsman can be found within their storm,
For only simple laws to which its clouds conform
Are seen to cut the facets of their product’s form.
In place of architect is found this sightless force
That every peerless pattern follows in its course,
With nothing but the laws of nature as its source.

And what of this complexity?  Is not it found
That chaos cannot generate a form so sound?
And in the squall where ragged wind and cloud abound,
Is not the ruling power one of anarchy?
Would not a perfect product of such forces be
In violation to the law of entropy?

Within the tempest’s hidden world of physic laws,
An order that exists in freezes and in thaws
Is sacrificed to cause what seems without a cause.
As with the sun, where tiny in the flaming void
Identities are broken, and their loss employed,
Such order can be found within a way destroyed.

To see that from decay must every beauty grow,
That all the purest lilies must have graves below,
Brings certain dark enlightenment, if one must know.
If so it is, what solace would we ever find?
From beauty brought about by no designer’s mind,
But in its place a rotting void that lies behind?

About the source of beauty, nothing can be said.
A thing cannot, when taken from an order dead,
By wishing be produced by something else instead.
But laws of nature show a glory all their own,
With order sprung from sources seen by them alone.
What governor it is, or if, is never known.
It's finally finished. Everything about this poem--the ideas behind it, the hexagonal structure, and the nested metaphors--represent the most work I've put into any single piece of writing since The Native. If you're wondering why I'm submitting a poem about snow in September, it's because I first started working on this piece in February.

Normally for this sort of thing I'd be saying something like "You'd better like it", but this poem will probably go against enough people's beliefs that I don't think that's a very reasonable thing to ask. But I'd appreciate it if you to at least put some thought into it when you read it, and try to understand what it's an analogy for and why I structured it the way I did.
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Da-Lizzard's avatar
A wonderful poem, I must admit. The metaphor makes perfect sense. But why only humans, I ask. That is one of the things that bothers me most about creationists and their assumption that humanity is perfection, God's magnum opus. Humans are not perfect. We have amazing abilities in cognitive thought, reasoning and creativity, but why can't every form of life be beautiful? Humans cannot be perfection, they still must eat living organisms for survival, they still get sick, they still die. These Laws of Nature apply to everyone in the domain of Nature, no matter how desperately we try and conquer it. Other animals are self aware like us. Some other animals possess rudiments of culture. And in any complex organism, albeit animal, plant, fungi, even protozoa, the processes and structures which have evolved for these creatures are so... mind numbingly complex. They are all beautiful in their own right. Not just humans. Humans are not above the natural world. They are only a part of it.